World [quest] Level 16- Dubious Luck (40+ Supporters!)

The One-eyed Guy · Mar 2, 2016

01100110111 said: ↑

HELLO
IT'S ME
YOUR FRIENDLY NEIGHBORHOOD GRAMMAR NAZI

I like the quest, but I found a few grammatical errors. :P

In both of the last two sentences, the word "now" is present. The repetition feels awkward; maybe find a synonym or simply remove the second "now".

Remove the hyphen (-), which should only be used to form compound words or to divide words. Replace it with an em-dash (—), and un-capitalize "He".

Words after semicolons should not be capitalized. Also, I think you meant "it's hard to miss", because that implies that you should be able to easily find it.

Not sure if you actually meant it like this or "Who's there?".

Words after semicolons should not be capitalized.

"It just feels like it'll help ease..." --> Ease what? Also, words after semicolons should not be capitalized.

Words after semicolons should not be capitalized. Also, "with the" not "withe".

Remove "just", and it should be "Its lore..." not "It's lore...".

Capitalize "bovemist".
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lmao, fixed

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World [quest] Level 16- Dubious Luck (40+ Supporters!)

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