New Quest

here is what I already wrote Forget the rest:

name:Appel mistery lvl.56 location "The Island of Peace" [new location, with just peaceful Mobs[lvl. 55]]
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Winny is doing a party. He heard a legend about a "Ultimate Golden Apple". He wants to have it aas an highlight for his party.

Stage1
Talk to Gunny at "The Island of Peace" at [cords]

Gunny[an iron Golem]:You can't enter here just like this.
Gunny:But wait. You look strange enough...
Gunny:Look, I'm not allowed to tell you that, but...
Gunny:Frank, my boss is searching for a hero like you...
Gunny:Maybe you could go inside his house, tell him I send you as the hero.

Stage2
Talk to Frank in his house

Winny:STOP, who are you?
Winny:What are you doing here?
Winny:Ahh, let me guess, Gunny told you about I'm searching a hero?
Winny:He wasn't alowed to tell you that, but he's right.
Winny:Did he told you what I am serching for?
Winny:No!? Typical Gunny says more than he is allowed but not more.
Winny:Look, I am searching for a apple.
Winny:Ohhhh, but not just a apple it's called "The Ultimate Apple".
Winny:The legends say it's a golden apple. The biggest apple the world have ever seen.
Winny:Bob should ate it to become so powerfull. But the legend sais it regenerates.
Winny:First I thought it's just a legend, but last week a traveller came to me and told me that he found a clue, that it should be anywhere in this forest.
Winny:A day later he died.
Winny:I think it's in a cave or a tomb or something else.
Winny:Anyway, I'll ask you to go and get the apple for me.
Winny:Look at the wall behind me. That are all my trophies.
Winny:One Trophy for each of my party.
Winny:But "The Ultimate Apple" would hang in my Party room in my cellar.
Winny:If you'll find it you wil be allowed to enter my party.
Winny:Sure you would get a reward something like my famous Guardian weapons.
Winny:But if you want to get one you have to bring me the apple.
Winny:Deal?
Winny:Nice, quick go and bring me the apple.

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and please not just negativ

 

Detail... please.....

Tbh, it doesn't sound fun, just annoying, and fetchy

 

I saw something like this in the german film Asterix erobert Rom [e:Asterix conquers rome]

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maybe you can add something like Mobs and the Labyrinth will Change or you have to break the rules anyway to get to the end of the quest

 

add
detail

 

please wait I'll add Detail when I'm ready with my Homework

But I'll add Detail

 

1. Use the reply button
2. If you want to have a slight chance of this being added you'll have to write out the entire quest.

 

You should edit your first post with this and add the dialogues, but I'll give constructive criticism anyway!

List of improvements

Why people want an ultimate golden apple in a party?
Why there's an apple in a secret labyrinth?
How this fits the lore?
One of Wynncraft's rules is no labyrinths
Paradoxes would just complicate the storyline more and more, it's random
What this apple does?
Why this person wants to stop you?
Quest level
Quest name
Quest stages, explained one by one
You're a warrior who lost your memory, you don't go to parties and have random fun
Parties don't fit Wynncraft's fantastic/medieval/magical way of living
You can't make people be angry or don't be angry at you randomly
Choices only in the end, the player will have the ability of trying to get the apple again if he/she doesn't get for the first time
Where is this labyrinth
Who build it?
How they know about it

 

A never said anything about a weapon

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So i have to write the whole Story first?

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If I have to write the whole Story I have to begin.

 

You should edit your first post, there's a button after your post, on the left called edit, click it and you'll be able to edit your post, if you want to call me use the Quote button and I never said anything about a weapon, in my opinion, yes, you should write the whole quest first, following this stage format: https://wiki.wynncraft.com/index.php?title=Temple_of_the_Legends_(Quest)

 

Hello? are you here?

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you said: What this weapon does?

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Ok I need time but I'll write the quest Story

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and maybe I need help

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In the new Christmas quest there is a "Party"

in much secrets are Labyrinths and it don't have to be difficult

 

remove detail

 

From what I understand, it's a mix of the labyrinth and the party of the gods from the beginning of the Iliad where the goddess of dischord throws in a golden apple with For The Most Beautiful inscribed on it as revenge for not being invited. They all fought over who was the most beautiful and three goddesses emerged as the final contestants. Aphrodite, goddess of beauty and love, Hera, goddess of marriage, child birth and wife(/sister but let's not go down that incest rabbit hole) of the king of the gods and last of all Athena goddess of war (but the more tactical side rather than the stabby stabby beserk way of Ares) and wisdom. They basically asked this shepherd who also happened to be a long lost prince to judge who was most beautiful. But it wasn't quite that. They all promised him something in return. The world's most beautiful woman, King of Europe and Asia and wisdom and skill in war. He chose Aphrodite and she sorta just let him become a prince of Troy again and steal the King of Sparta's wife. And we all know not to steal from Sparta. So the King, who's brother is another powerful king, asks his brother to rally every king in Greece to raze Troy and take back his wife. Of course they land in the wrong place first and raze the wrong city. And then they sacrifice a king's daughter to have wind but she was replaced with a doe at the last second. You know, normal stuff. Just for those who didn't know the story, also it can be a basis for a better version of the quest.

 

I don't know the Story It was my own idea

 

You couldn't have just put the details in that post?

 

Now I wrote a Background Story please leave me feed Back! thx

Frank is doing a party. He heard a legend about a "Ultimate Apple". He wants to have it as an highlight for his Party. He is searching for a strange hero who could search it for him.

 

Feedback - please stop.

 

Remember to quote who you are replying to. Also, edit your main post, so we are able to read the post as soon as we click on the thread. Add a poll as well!

 

I don't know how to add a poll

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I already write the quest

 

I'm pretty sure English isn't your first language, I believe it's German? If so @Lord_He1mchen can tell you about how wynncraft suggestions should be structured.

 

did he actually remove the fucking details oh my god