Video I'd Love Some Feedback

I've recently started my own youtube channel and after posting my first video on wynncraft I wanted to get some feedback.

 

(Notice: I don't want to be harsh, but I'm just giving you tips on things I noticed.)
Things to note:
Until you were explaining things, your narrating was louder than your commentating - maybe try up-ing your volume.
Some things you didn't explain:
-Mythic items (I can understand why you didn't explain)
-Soul points
-Potions (You hovered over it a few times, if I was new I would've wondered what that 3/3 was all about)

I do honestly think it was a cool video, though! It was a good intro to Wynncraft, and the amazing things it has to offer.

 

thanks for the feedback i'll work in the things i missed out and yes i will also sort out the volume mixing. ;p

 

bumpy bump bump

 

It's pretty good, just keep practicing and you'll get it eventually!
Wait what am I saying I've never done a commentary before in my life ;-;

 

What's your actual channel tho? ;-;

 

well its a bunch of random stuff including wynncraft

 

bumpity bump bump

 

I seriously couldn't hear you.