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Music Fanmade Wynncraft Song: The Song Of A Shattered Heart (complete)

Discussion in 'Your Work' started by highbread, Oct 8, 2018.

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rate this on a scale from 1-10, make sure to leave feedback (what was good, what could be improved)

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  1. highbread

    highbread hybrid man HERO

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    i feel like this is my best song so far

    originally, this was gonna be in part 3 of this questline i made in general suggestions but i never got around to making it so here it is now.
    i spent a few days on this, so i put quite a bit of thought into it

    so yeah please give feedback guys, it's really appreciated.
     
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  2. Acius

    Acius traps are not gay

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    Feedback time uwu! Your composition is excellent, it's probably one of the best compositions I've heard in a while, listening to your music is like a ride! Though there are a few things I want to nit pick. First, to be honest, I'm a big sucker for dynamic changes and I think that a wider range in dynamics could give your composition a extra layer of goodness that I think the piece will benefit a lot from. Secondly, correct me if I'm wrong, but this piece doesn't feel like there's much structure. I know that composing takes a lot of work and time, I believe that by making the composition longer you'd be able to add more structure into the piece. I just want to say how much I like this piece, I love the way the composition ended, it is an awesome ending to an awesome piece. It's wonderful to find people like you who dedicate time and effort into making compositions, I hope you will continue making compositions and I hope that this reply has helped you.
     
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    Corpe _ harambe VIP+

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    i feel an original part at the end would've been more effective at making spooky build up
    you can probably just finish the main melody where the echoes are
    good tho
     
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  4. highbread

    highbread hybrid man HERO

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    well this is luckily not a huge issue because
    so it's actually not complete yet
    i'll keep this in mind, thanks
    h a r m o n y
     
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    Euxis Skilled Adventurer VIP

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    It's nice but...

    For me it's very quiet, maybe it's just me.
     
  6. Captain Flavio

    Captain Flavio Editor of Foppish Gourmet Weekly HERO

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    It's great, you should do more. Any idea on where it would play?
     
  7. highbread

    highbread hybrid man HERO

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    yeah it's quiet but it's not an issue with the song itself, it's my recording stuff. when i finish the song and upload it, i'll make sure that it's not so quiet
    links are in my signature if you're curious
     
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  8. highbread

    highbread hybrid man HERO

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    just finished the song, feedback on the complete version would be very greatly appreciated
     
  9. StarroZeld

    StarroZeld Well-Known Adventurer

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    I like it. Don't quite know what kind of feedback to give, though.
     
  10. SethPRG

    SethPRG I will compose your demise HERO

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    Would've given you a 7/10, but 0:24-1:00 is a really cool melody, so let's bump that up to an 8. Nice work, just try to avoid having parts repeat a lot, and tone it down a notch or two on the percussion.
     
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    HalfCat_ Supporter of Catania

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    Don’t! I really love this song. I agree that it gets a little bit repetetive at the end. Would have been better with a slightly altered melody to really wrap it up nicely. I really love the percussion and the melody is fantastic. However by the title it seems like it’s supposed to be like an emotional song but it’s so high energy and the beat makes it sound like a boss song. 10/10 still because it’s just so damn good.
     
  12. Stormarend

    Stormarend Disrespectfully disagreeing

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    I've got to commend you for not being terrible. However, I do feel that having an ongoing melody would've helped instead of constantly having the same motif in the foreground. Maybe I could let it pass if you were going for a spooky or emotional vibe, but judging by the rhythm of the percussion and the bass (and title) this doesn't seem the case (and that rhymed whoop dee doo). If that was what you were going for, I agree with Seth that the percussion should be toned down and probably just changed, right now it's quite uninteresting. Right now there's a very consistent ongoing rhythm, that drives the piece forward, which doesn't really work in this context. In my opinion every note should be drawn out, made as important as possible when you're trying to hit someone right in the feels, instead of instantly moving on to the next whenever you get the chance.

    Having said that, good effort though.

    And sorry if nothing I said made any sense, I hope I explained my thoughts clearly enough.
     
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  13. highbread

    highbread hybrid man HERO

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    basically it's supposed to be a boss theme which i was trying to give a type of heartbroken, but also vengeful type of feel to. this is also really subtly hinted towards with the name, if i were to be going for a full out emotional feel, i probably woulda used "broken" instead of "shattered", but the latter option i thought gave it more of the atmosphere i was trying to achieve
    there's probably more context to understanding the song in the quest suggestion i meant to make it for but eh it's probably not super necessary