Comments on Profile Post by Enhanced_Human

o-o my book isn't that good dude

Opinion.

I want to read it.

Did you read the excerpt thing?

Enough of it that I want more.

o-o uh. Can you tell me what you like about it.

Just the story base of it, I guess. Taking video game stats into a situation with real characters.

Either that, or I'm just a sap for fantasies.

;p okay thanks. I already finished the story I am now going through heavy editing stage

YAY!

How are you going to present it to an audience?

no idea. I probably won't since I ama too embarressed that its a bad story. Also, check out your work section, I made a new pole thing

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What good is a story that no one hears?

That's like painting art that no one sees.

i don't think my story is that good, thats all

Okay.

I really want to read the rest of your story too, it's so awesome! You doubt your writing skills too much. Don't be too pessimistic about it, that's my job c:

It's pretty good

It's more than just "pretty good," I could read it all day!

After all, remember what Xavier said!
he's a great mind,
he says your a great mind
you must be a great mind

do you really want to read a story about a boy going through puberty trying to become stronger to ask out a girl while trying to survive in a labyrinth of death?

Who wouldn't?

Yes

YES
OF COURSE I WANT TO READ THAT

:I Welp. Time to go finish a story.
I will be making a comic version of the prologue soon since it is relatively short. I hope it will turn out well.

It'll also be a great "trailer" piece!

YAY!

yeah I guess. A trailer for a movie that won't be released in a decade

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More storyyyyy ^-^

For a book that'll hopefully be released soon though!
And honestly, I don't know if it's just me or something, but the reception for your story seems pretty positive.

Might be just me though, idk. XD

Is this the real life?
Or is this Kim's story,
Caught in a landslide
Of three guys who want to know more

well thanks for the encouragement.

did you guys see the ending pole?

mmhmm

im guessing you guys voted neutral? While that is fine and all, I don't really want the relatively innocent Chime to kill someone.

hmm, if you do, it'd have to be a interesting character development. In one of my favorite series, the main character, a youngish boy, quickly becomes one of the top soldiers and kills a lot of people. It's more of because he's forced into that position due to his powers and the threats to his friends though

I'm not sure I want him to develop that way. As I said, I planned out most of the story. The original I planned was for the happy route.but based on popular demand, the neutral route seems to be in favor. Idk what to dooo ;-;

why not both? Have the ending split and let the reader choose what happens in one scenario which will decide the ending! Then you can appease both groups.

go for happy route
the most important part is all parts flow and fit together. If you force a type of ending, it will seem awkward and won't be fun to write

that too
what coolfood said

While interesting Xavier, I don't think that really fits the style of the genre. Maybe if it were a webcomic or something.
Also, the story does not seem to lead to Chime to develop in a dark way. I think he should stay young and innocent. You could even add that as a small "theme" in the story where others might shield him a little. Ack, it's hard to describe

coolfood's idea works better
as per usual

how on earth do I make it split.

ignore everything I said it's a book not a webcomic listen to coolfood he actually knows what he's talking about

Links!
Splitting plot lines is usually found in webcomics or choose your own adventure type of stuff.

And Xavier, don't sell yourself short! Your muzaks are nice and you've given me plenty of good ideas!

I want Chime to be sort of timid and quiet near the beginning. Later on, he will gain more confidence