World [quest] Perished Warriors Of Wynn Part 1 (lvl 60)

Hello everyone!
I am making this thread to share my quest idea, and see if I can get any supporters :D Hope you like it!​

The quest will start in a house in the Dark Forest at x: -1372 z: -5388 and will be greeted by Ivvanus

Green Text = Ivvanus Dialogue
Pink Text = Cathesra Dialogue
Orange Text = Quest Intructions


Ivvanus First Encounter:
[1/9] Ivvanus: *pant* Days...weeks...years
[2/9] Ivvanus: Wha... Who...? Why. Yes! Hello, I am Ivvanus! I may have a task for you,
adventurer!
[3/9] Ivvanus: I am a retired Wynn warrior. I would travel all over the provinces with my friends. We were the bravest and the strongest out of everyone...
[4/9] Ivvanus: Until one day. 6 years ago... we were exploring a very strange area, named Lexdale. We have dealt with all types of monsters, bosses, you name it. But I knew something was off that day. *sniff*
[5/9] Ivvanus: I cant remember much. All I can remember from the fateful day is getting dragged away, as I see my friends dying before my eyes, and then poof. Blackness.
[6/9] Ivvanus: It does not make sense. How the strongest warriors, taken out in a matter of minutes, and cant even recall the day...
[7/9] Ivvanus: I need to figure out the mystery... Uncover the truth of what happened on that day, and how the greatest warriors were taken down so easily. You, adventurer, can help me.
[8/9] Ivannus: I will reward you greatly. Please, I need to know the truth of my best friends.
[9/9] Ivvanus: Great! I have heard rumors of them being seen in a cave at Gelibord. Good luck adventurer! I will write the cords in your book... and, there you are!

You will then have to go to the cave said. In the cave will be monsters to fight, going deep down. Towards the end of the cave will be a parkour challenge, followed by a puzzle. After completing the puzzle, there will be a boss room. The boss will have 35k health. Killing it will drop an item named "Iron Helmet" with a description, "A rusty old helmet...". You will then leave the cave and return to Ivvanus.

Ivvanus Second Encounter:
[1/5] Ivvanus: Welcome back! What have you found?
[2/5] Ivvanus: A helmet...? Hm... interesting.
[3/5] Ivvanus: Yet still so confusing.
[4/5] Ivvanus: Adventurer, there is a second cave you might be able to get clues from. It is near, ill write the coords into your quest book for you again
[5/5] Ivvanus: ...there you are! Good luck!


You will then proceed to the second cave. This cave will be quite similar to the first. The cave will have monsters to fight. About 20 blocks down the cave, there will be a broken ancient ruind type scructure, which will be a parkour challenge. After this, the cave will go deep down, with harder mobs then the first cave to fight. No puzzle this time, it will lead straight to a boss with 65k health. Killing this boss will drop another item named "Iron Leggings" with a description of "Rusty old leggings...". You will then have to return back to Ivvanus.

Ivvanus Third Encounter:
[1/9] Ivvanus: Welcome back adventurer! Have you found anything new?
[2/9] Ivvanus: Hmm, pants this time? *sniffle*
[3/9] Ivvanus: Wait a second...my god...
[4/9] Ivvanus: This is my dear friends armor! Frousince leggings and Enderim's helmet! It still smells like them...
[5/9] Ivvanus: Like cold... like bravery...like death.
[6/9] Ivvanus: I feel as I can still see them here with me... everyday, I believe they will come back, but they never do. *sob*
[7/9] Ivvanus: As if I can still see Enderim's face when I look into his helmet...but its nothing but death and despair of an old legend and warrior.
[8/9] Ivvanus: Take these armor pieces to a friend of mine, Cathesra! She is a scientist and may be able to find more information. Her lab should be straight west from here.
[9/9] Ivvanus: Now go, and be careful!

This time, no cords will be given. Going west you will find a lab encaved into a mountain. Entering the lab will include very strong enemies to fight. It will be a big structure. Going further in the lab will be a parkour challenge. After will be more mobs to fight, followed by another puzzle. After completing the puzzle you will enter Cathesra's lab.

2nd NPC Cathesra:
[1/10] Cathesra: Yes...yes! This experiment should work! *heavy breathing*
[2/10] Cathesra: Huh, why who has dared to enter my lab!
[3/10] Cathesra: No one simply walks in here without a conclusion of death! Define yourself!
[4/10] Cathesra: Hm, Ivvanus? Why didn't you say so! What can I do for you?
[5/10] Cathesra: I wont be able to do much, as I am busy. But, the least I can do is examine the armor for you. Hand it over.
[6/10] Cathesra: Hm...
[7/10] Cathesra: Wow, very interesting.
[8/10] Cathesra: Very strange, my machine cant pick up many details from these armor pieces...
[9/10] Cathesra: My machine says it encountered 3 samples of fresh blood, but cant identify the victims of the blood.
[10/10] Cathesra: This is all i can do for you, adventurer. I am very busy, now off with you!



Cathesra will give you 2 items, "Examined Iron helmet" and "Examined Iron Leggings". You will then return both pieces of armor to Ivvanus.


Ivvanus (Last Encounter):
[1/8] Ivvanus: Welcome back. Could she do anything for you? She can be very rude...
[2/8] Ivvanus: This all she could do? Unfortunate. Well, what was the info you were able to get?
[3/8] Ivvanus: What...
[4/8] Ivannus: 3 fresh blood samples?! That must mean there still alive! There still out there in the world!
[5/8] Ivvanus: I knew they were stronger then I thought! Gosh, how have they survived after all these years? But, you said 3 blood samples?
[6/8] Ivvanus: We know 2 things.
[7/8] Ivvanus: My friends are still out there in the world... alive.
[8/8] Ivvanus: 2 is that... they aren't alone...
[9/9] Ivvanus: Thank you for your help adventurer. Please, take these rewards. Also, take my old boots. I wont be needing them anymore.

Rewards: 1 LE, 150,000 XP, Unidentified boots rare
Boots:
Ivannus' Boots

+1100 Health

Level Minimum 60
Quest Required: Perished Warriors Of Wynn

+2 Strength
+68/2s Life Steal
+1 Agility
+10 Earth Defense
-4 Intelligence
+56 health regen
-5 Fire Defense
-6% Fire Defense



The quest will then end here. Please leave feedback on this quest! Thank you for reading ! Also forgot to add a poll, so just like if you support.

 

it seems a little fetchy but i appreciate your effort

 

So "Go to cave, kill some stuff, parkour, puzzle, return, repeat, repeat, go to new cave, fight, parkour, undescribed puzzle talk to new person, return."
A glorified fetch quest.

Add unique fights (better than "generic enemy") and detail on enemies, parkour, and puzzles. Also some grammar, but it's mostly fine.

You can add a poll using the thread tools.

Also the character referenced "bosses" so fix that
and coords so fix that
they dont exist ingame. Bosses aren't a recognized concept, and "coords" is slang and does not exist ingame.

 

This seems like a pretty well thought-out suggestion! The quest could certainly do with some improvements, namely describe the puzzle and try adding some more interesting story instead of just ‘go here, come back, go there, come back, go there, come back’

Maybe the place where the people were has nothing there, and so you need to figure out where to go to find them. Maybe those footprints might help...

Little improvements like that would greatly improve this suggestion.

 

I like the idea, but it needs some work.

First of all I'd like to start with balancing. On my lvl 74 mage using an ethereal it took me like 20 minutes to kill Baab who only has 25k health. One of the bosses you propose has 65k and is at lvl 60.

Next is just little details to nitpick. You say there is fresh blood on the armour, yet it is rusted and old. You could say that the blood is a year old at least to allow some time for someone's armour to decay.

I'm not sure how I like Ivannus's dialogue. Am I supposed to believe that this composed well behaved veteran just randomly starts breaking down? You could write it right of the bat as him being depressed.

For example

A different character telling you to go check up on the old guy who always stays to himself.

When you speak to him he is aggresive at first, and when he heard you wanted to help he sends you on a suicide mission to retrieve a helmet.

Have the first boss drop both the helmet and leggings

When you comes back he realizes whose helmet it is and immediately shows regret. He then begins the quests exposition.

Add some pauses and hints that speaking of his old party members is painful.

Completely remove the second boss and have him send you to Cathesra

Have him apologizing for "*sobbing*"

*bam* character development

Remove Invannus's boots and replace them with Enderim's helmet as a quest item for part II

As for positives I really like Cathesra's dialogue. It's just interesting. It's even better when the warning that she's a jerk after the fact.

That's all for me. Good luck with your suggestion.