New Quest: Moon's Light Lv.93

My first draft was called "Moon Glow" and I am back with, hopefully, a better quest idea. Now, I have decided to relocate to a more appropriate area. Because this quest is for level 93, it can't be in "Half Moon Island" like I originally would have liked. Instead it takes place at the big tree East of Ahmsord , where you meet Lupin. When you go and speak to him, he will say:

[Lupin] Greetings young traveller.
[Lupin] Is it possible that you can help me?
[Lupin] Thank you! I knew a Fruma Soldier wouldn't let me down.
[Lupin] Anyway, lets get on with this quest!
[Lupin] Your task is to find the Moon Pendant.
[Lupin] What is this pendant you ask?
[Lupin] Well, it holds the power of the Moon, without it, night wouldn't exist.
[Lupin] The trouble is, Solen, the sun guardian has stolen it from me.
[Lupin] This is bad news, because the sun and moon don't mix, and that raw power, it's driving him mad!
[Lupin] I am fearing that he is planning to do something bad with all that power.
[Lupin] We need to find out what he is planning, and stop him before it's too late!
[Lupin] I don't know where he is hiding, but maybe an experienced Sun Mage will.
[Lupin] I believe you can find one in Ahmsord, look for someone named Felicity.

From there, you are meant to visit Ahmsord. There, in the center you will see a stall selling Magma Worms, in the stall will be Felicity.

[Felicity] Do you want to buy some Magma Worms?
[Felicity] They are great food to feed your pet dragon!
[Felicity] What? You don't have a pet dragon? Why doesn't anyone have a pet dragon!
[Felicity] Do I know where Solen is?
[Felicity] No, is it important?
[Felicity] I see, so he has gone mad?
[Felicity] I can try and summon him, but it will cost you.
[Felicity] It isn't cheap, but I am reliable , so the fee will be 1 le.

Once you have 1le, and give it to her, she will walk to her house from the market, expecting you to follow (like when you enter Corkus City, or the Jungle Laboratory). Once you first walk into her house, there will be a scene where u are standing at the side, incased in barriers, while you watch her summon Solen. You will see lots of fire particles form in front of her, slowly building up until it reaches 2 blocks tall and the particles are thick. Once that happens there will be a mini explosion and Solen will appear. There is a little fire and nether brick, stuff like that around him. But Felicity is knocked out. You are free to move around now, he will say (when you talk to him):

[Solen] What is the meaning of this? I was doing important business!
[Solen] Soldier, did you summon me?
[Solen] So, you want to know where the Moon Pendant is?
[Solen] I am guessing Lupin, the moon guardian sent you.
[Solen] Well, he is trying to stop me solving the worlds problems.
[Solen] Yes, I have a plan to get rid of evil in all the provences.
[Solen] Don't try and stop me.
[Solen] If you go anywhere near Lupin again, you will pay with your life!
[Solen] No one will get in the way of my chance to become a hero.

At that note, you go back into the barrier case, with some sizzling, and a bang, Solen is gone. Felicity wakes up. You can move again, When you talk so Felicity, she says:

[Felicity] Wha-What happened?
[Felicity] I was unconscious, damn it! I still managed to summon Solen though?
[Felicity] Good, but he really is mad? That sounds awful!
[Felicity] I would love to help, but I am feeling exhausted from the summoning.
[Felicity] Here have this Magma Worm, you never know when it will be useful.
[Felicity] Good luck with the rest of your quest.

You can leave the house after that, and you are meant to return to Lupin. Once you find him again at the tree, he will say

[Lupin] So your back with the Moon Pendant?
[Lupin] Oh man, that not good.
[Lupin] I believe he is planning to destroy the Moon Pendent.
[Lupin] That would unbalance the whole world! Everything will be in chaos.
[Lupin] You will have to find him qui-

There is a rumble with ground particles and breaking block sounds, the ground disappears and you and Lupin fall into a hole. You fall into the coal blocks that make everything go black and fill you with nausea. Once you can see again, you are in a quartz-nether-looking temple underground. At the far end is Solen on a throne. In between you and his throne, is a short parkour (something like 8 jumps). At the bottom is lava.

[Lupin] You are going to have to continue without me.
[Lupin] If I get to close to Solen, our opposite powers could cause the cave to rip apart, and who knows what's above.
[Lupin] Carry on Adventurer, I believe you can do this, you have to.

As you go through the parkour, Solen will say:​

[Solen] I told you not to go back to Lupin, but you didn't listen.
[Solen] I am not the bad guy, in fact I am going to be the Hero of the world!
[Solen] If I destroy the Moon Pendant, night will cease to exist, and all corruption, and evil will stop.
[Solen] Everywhere will be day all the time and happiness will be restored!

He will stop speaking until you reach his throne. Then he will say:

[Solen] It's a shame you had to try and stop me.
[Solen] Now it's time to die! Have fun with my pet.

There is a blinding flash and your screen goes white and then dark with nausea, when you can see again, you are at one end of a long narrow corridor. The sides are made of nether materials. Behind you is a dragon. You can't move and you here a voice:

[Solen] Run, run, run before the dragon gets you!
[Solen] What fine entertainment.

Then you can move and a 40 second timer appears on your screen. You have to fun forward and climb over obstacles, do bits of parkour, avoid fire and dodge fireballs from the dragon. If you manage to make it to the end, there will be hopper with a sign above saying "If you want to calm it's mood, then drop its favourite kind of food" (2 signs might be needed). If you drop 1 Magma Worm into the hole before the timer runs out, then the timer will stop. A doorway also opens with coal at the back, once you step in you will be teleported to a mini arena. Solen will say:

[Solen] You have frustrated me far too much!
[Solen] If you are brave enough, then come and get me. I am in the next room.

In the current room there will be a hopper at the far end wanting 25 Sun Tokens. There will be "Fire Drakes" that you need to kill to get tokens so you can open the door. Once completed, the door will open, with more coal at the back.
Once you go through, you will be teleported to a slightly bigger arena, where Solen stands in the middle, as a mob now, not an NPC. He will have Fire damage, and Lightning Defence and Water weakness. (I am not sure about the rest). I want to make him a fairly hard boss. Once you "Kill him" you receive the Moon Pendant.
Solen appears as an NPC in the middle of the arena, once you speak to him he says:

[Solen] Owww, you hit me in the head really hard!
[Solen] Wait... who are you, and where am I?
[Solen] Last time I checked, I was at Remus' house leaving him a gift, when I saw...
[Solen] Oh great, I was drawn to the power of the Moon Pendant, I went mad didn't I?
[Solen] I am so sorry, I am not usually like that, I will not go anywhere near the Pendant ever again!
[Solen] You'd better leave before I get drawn to that, thing, again.
[Solen] The exit is behind me.

The exit is behind Solen, opposite to the entrance. There is coal at the end, and when you walk through, you appear back up by that big tree, with Lupin is next to you.

[Lupin] You got the Pendant?
(You hand him the Moon Pendant)
[Lupin] Yes, I can feel the power flow through me.
[Lupin] So Solen isn't crazy any more? Well that's a relief!
[Lupin] I knew it was a bad idea to take my eye off that Moon Pendant.
[Lupin] I shall never let it out of my sight ever again!
[Lupin] Thank you for keeping the balance between the Sun and the Moon.
[Lupin] Here is your reward!

You receive 2le and almost a full level of XP. You also receive an Earth Token. This can be used in the Sun and Moon stalls next to the big tree. Where you can buy armor or weapons of the sun and moon.

Thank you for reading this thread. The builds and fights I haven't given much detail in, this is because I don't have much knowledge of those things.

Also, before any of you say "Why didn't Lupin go and solve the problem himself". It's because it isn't good for the Sun and Moon to mix and if he got to involved, something bad would have happened.

I understand if some of you think this quest is a bit short, but if people like this idea, and it gets added to Wynn, then more can be added and changed by the content team.

Anyway, I hope you enjoyed. Feel free to leave any suggestions!

~WynnBeenix

 

Way better than your previous quests. There are a few minor spelling mistakes, and you accidentally refer to Lupin as Remus a few times, but it's overall good.

 

How did I not realise that! I have changed all Remus back to Lupin. Thanks!

 

One thing I just noticed, having the player drop the magma worm won't work - seeing as they could lose it. It would be better to have an NPC that collects the magma worm, which would be a quest item.

 

Great quest and idea overall, and it was executed quite well. While there does need to be a few tweaking to be done, and stats to be added, I like the idea and the quest stages. It's not a big important quest like The Temple of Legends, but it still has its own unique storyline and Boss. So I give it a 9/10 on idea, and 8/10 on the thread itself. So 8.5/10 overall quest.

 

Nice quest!

 

Eyy good job man. You're good at taking critiqe to you and improve, this is actually pretty good. There are some minot things i think could/should be fixed though. The parts i don't comment on are the ones i think are good already.

*Wynn soldier. Frumians and Wynnians are all human, so it wouldn't make sense if Lupin could tell them apart. Therefore the player is typicly called a Wynn soldier, soldier of Wynn or just a soldier. Small detail, but I'm nitpicky

That is a little blunt. Most of the first paragraph is. Try to make Lupin sound more fluid in his speach, as that will make him seem less like an instructer and more like an actual character. Maybe something like this?
[Lupin] You see, The Moon Pendant, a sacred relic i was to protect was recently stolen
[Lupin] The pendant holds the very essence of night. If it gets damaged, or worse, destroyed...
[Lupin] It would cast the world into constant daytime. Rivers and lakes would dry up, crops would die, fields would become deserts.
[Lupin] To make matters worse, it is my polar opposite Solen, Guardian of the sun that took it from me.

I actually really like this part, although i think the one LE fee is pretty pointless. Nobody at level 98 doesn't have one LE, so it's just an annoying walk to the bank and nothing else. Either remove this part and change the reward to 3 LE, or make the player do something like get a fresh delivery of magma worms for the NPC

Uhh why are we trying to steal back the pendant then? Why do we trust Solen less than Lupin? Because Lupin called dips on our help in the start of the quest? A bit of a plothole

Again, why do we trust moon boi

S o w h y d o w e t r y t o s t o p h i m
for all we know he is telling the truth

That might be a little overkill, but i don't know how rewards are for level 90-100 quests

Explain this more clearly in the actual quest, maybe in the first paragraph

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Wow that was much better than most quest suggestions i have seen. 8,5/10

 

Quickgrade: B

Did good son.

 

Wanna bet? XD

 

If you don't have 1 le at level 98 you're doing something wrong...

 

Thank you for making another comment to help me improve.
I got quite stuck with the first things that Lupin says. I found it hard to try and keep it as short as that, but explain a lot to the player. This is because, if it was to short, no one would know what is going on. But if it's to long, then it'll get boring.
Also I wanted to make the "moon guardian" seem wise, and that's why he knows you are from Fruma. That was sorta my reason to why you trust him, because he knows about your past. I am not going to change the way that Lupin sounds in the first paragraph for now, but I like the way it flows the way you said it.
Maybe I will make another thread in the future will all things patched up. But for now, I want to see other peoples suggestions.
I was going to make the player have to get something else, like "remin leaves" for her summoning, but then everyone would complain "It'S tO fEtChY! sTaWp It!".
Again, thank you for replying to my thread!

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Because you graded a "B". Do you mind if you can leave some suggestions for how I can improve?

 

It’s true! I’m lvl 97 (close to 98) and I have a net worth of 48eb.

 

Nice over all. I just think someone might find it a bit heady with a brand new story line, if this is to escalate. Or, if it is to be on its own, its a nice addition to some of the game's eccentricness.

 

I am not sure whether this should be a "stand alone" idea, or if I should expand it. I could add a Sun quest as well.

 

Just a quick question: shouldn't the title be Moonlight? Or is it called Moon's Light for a purpose?

 

Or you bought a good set/mythic.

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The grading of suggestions is completely relative to other suggestions.
The quest is good, but the LE fee is kinda a bad idea.
Quests have a number amount for EXP, not level %.
Something so important should have an item reward, definitely based around solar/lunar stuff.
There was an option to place a choice in there, allowing for two possible rewards, but this is a very set path.
A lot of higher level quests involve a choice, you should definitely consider having the player choose between the sun and the moon.

 

You should set a definitive amount of exp gained, not just a %of your exp bar value

 

I don't really know how much xp gets you up that far, so I would rather say a % than guess. Also I added another quest reward.

I don't know how much xp you get for an "almost full level". So I would rather pot a percentage than a random guess to how much xp is gained.

 

It takes a quick google search to find this: https://wynncraft.gamepedia.com/Experience_Points
Assuming the player does this at the min lvl 93 it would take 7,070,000 xp to level up. Since you said almost you could just reduce that number but an amount.

 

We have a wiki for a reason