World New Quest: The Old Mechanical Ruins Part I&ii { Now Light Theme Friendly }

INTRO:​

This is a series of two quests that I've thought about making for quite a few weeks now and would really appreciate any contribution whether it be about my grammar or my syntax. Ill only include the First quest for now and it won't be fully completed as I add to plan where its location will be+mobs+npcs/items.

The Old Mechanical Ruins I:​

The Machine Hunter I:
Length: Long/Medium
Difficulty: Hard
Lv start: 85

Talk to Linus in Corkus City:
When Below Lv: [1/1]Oh hello, you must be interested in the old mechanical ruins but unfortunately you are not strong enough to go there yet, so come back at lv 85[1/1]
When at right Lv:[1/4]Oh hello adventurer, I have been studying the old ancient corkian machines and I want to learn how to use them to stop the corruption in Wynn.[1/4]
[2/4]Weird anomalies have been occurring however, and the robots are regaining consciousness.[2/4]
[3/4]Look at the old ancient mechanical bunkers near the south of the island, and speak to my friend Furguson.[3/4]
[4/4]He'll explain what the bunkers are and how to get inside, Good Luck![4/4]
Quest Started: The Old Mechanical Ruins I
After you have talked to him:
[1/1]Go now to see the ancient ruins.[1/1]

---------------------------------

Talk to Furguson at xx/xx coords:
When Below Lv: [1/1]Do I know you? Get out of my sight! I need to figure out how to open these blast doors.[1/1]
When at right Lv:
[1/7]Who the heck are you! Have you been following me?[1/7]
[2/7]Oh Linus sent you, I hope he knows what he's doing trying to get a person like you to help us. But very well Ill trust you.[2/7]
[3/7]The old Corkians made these bunkers in case of an attack of Fruma to bring them back. They used so much electro magic that the bunkers became self aware and so did the machines inside them.[3/7]
[4/7] Hey! Are you paying attention? This is important because they sealed the machines away in several bunkers however they are clawing themselves out and they need to be eradicated.[4/7]
[5/7] Now when you go inside now you need to open the lock on the blast doors by finding the correct combination. Then you fight your way inside to get to the core overdrive crystal and bring that back to me by restarting the broken elevator.[5/7]
[6/7] Be careful because as soon as you enter I will lock the blast doors to stop the machines from leaving the bunker, and due to the bunker being crafted from one of the toughest metals in Gavel you cannot leave by scrolls.[6/7]
[7/7] Now go, what are you waiting for, man? [7/7]
After you have talked to him:
[1/1]Hurry up, I don't have time for people like you who sit around all day![1/1]

------------------------------

Now you go down the cave entrance till you reach the blast doors preferably made of stone and iron where there is a puzzle similar to the one in Stage four of the Heart of Llevigar quest. Once completed you can enter the bunker and the blast doors will close. Then you have to fight your way through:

Lv: 86
Name: Cogged Horse
Health: 2,150
Damage: 510-530
Elemental Def: ✦Thunder/❋Air
Elemental Dam: ✦Thunder
Elemental Weakness: ❉Water

Lv: 86
Name: Mechanical Bat
Health: 2,000
Damage: 520-540
Elemental Def: ✦Thunder/❋Air
Elemental Dam: ❋Air
Elemental Weakness: ❉Water

Now once you've fought off these mobs there will be another blast door with another puzzle just like the beginning. Now once you've opened these doors and go through there will be no more mobs but you have to parkour to the door which can only be opened by parkouring to the 4 mechanical heads in chamber and leaving something on the pressure plate. Then once you get to the boss room you will fight the boss:

Lv: 89
Name: Steel Bull
Health: 190,ooo
Damage: 500-1600
Elemental Def: ✦Thunder/❋Air/✤Earth
Elemental Dam: ✦Thunder/✤Earth
Elemental Weakness: ✹Fire
Speed: Quite Fast (not as fast as bob)

Description: Spawns Mechanical Bats and looks like a bull covered in metal. Special attack is charge.

Once you've finished fighting the boss in the chamber pick up the core override crystal which looks like a ender-crystal skin then head to the coal teleporter which teleports you to a lift shaft with a view to the outside. Then complete a red stone puzzle to activate the elevator to get you out.

------------------------------

Note: It should be possible to use scrolls to teleport out of the mineshaft.

------------------------------

Once you get out head back to Furguson and he'll say:
[1/4] Finally I've been waiting all day you couldn't have taken any longer could've you?[1/4]
[2/4] Show me the core![2/4]
[3/4] Oh, its broken. We need to fix it, quickly head back to Linus I'm sure he knows where to find someone to fix this.[3/4]
[4/4] Now go the machines won't stay in there bunkers for long![4/4]
After you have talked to him:
[1/1]Hurry up, I don't have time for people like you who sit around all day![1/1]

Speak to Linus in Corkus City:
[1/4] Oh no, the core. L'emme see![1/4]
[2/4] We have to fix this quickly otherwise we won't be able to override the machines in time.[2/4]
[3/4] We need to make a golden circuit board to replace the broken one. We can't use another metal because magic can't flow freely in other metals.[3/4]
[4/4] Now go to my friend Ulipson she'll help us get the gold even if we have to steal from the Avos. She moved to the Llevigar docks a few years ago to help repair ships. Her Mechanical Knowlege is unpresened.[4/4]
After you have talked to him:
[1/1] Go now, we don't have much time.[1/1]

Speak to Ulipson in a house in the docks of Llevigar.
[1/4] Hello, do y'all need me for somethin'. [1/4]
[2/4] You need A golden circuit board.[2/4]
[3/4] Well if Linus sent y'all here he definitely has a plan. Go to the cave system left of here and fight the bandits to get the Gold we need.[3/4]
[4/4] Then come back to me Ill direct you to a forger called sylens he'll craft a new one for you. Bring it back to me and I'll do the wiring for you.[4/4]
After you have talked to her:
[1/1] Remember we need the gold.[1/1]

Enter the cave system the fight your way through:

Lv: 87
Name: Shadow Bandit
Health: 1,800
Damage: 540-560
Elemental Def: ❋Air/✤Earth
Elemental Dam: ✤Earth
Elemental Weakness: ✦Thunder
Speed: Fast

Lv: 87
Name: Shadow Knife Thrower
Health: 2,500
Damage: 530
Elemental Def: ❋Air/✦Thunder
Elemental Dam: ❋Air
Elemental Weakness: ✹Fire
Speed: Average

Then you fight your way through to the central chamber then you see a Cage with a giant metal beast inside.

[1/4] Look who we have here.[1/4]
[2/4] A rogue adventurer who clearly doesn't know what he's doing.[2/4]
[3/4] Well if you want my Gold your going to Have to kill me.[3/4]
[4/4] But I think that we both know that your Going to die.[4/4]

Lv: 92
Name: Bandit Dredgar
Health: 200,000
Damage: 2,000
Elemental Def: ✤Earth/❋Air
Elemental Dam: ❋Air
Elemental Weakness: ❉Water

Once boss battle finishes a cutscene plays where you hide and Three people appear from the door in the entrance way.

[1/4] By the Blessed Sanctum what happened here? [1/4]
[2/4] I told you we shouldn't have trusted those bandits.[2/4]
[3/4] Guards search the area we can't let whoever did this to find the siege plans![3/4]
[4/4] Hurry, otherwise the whole operation could be in jeopardy! [4/4]

------------------------------

Sorry thats all for today I spent way to much time on this and the quest is only about a third done. Tell me what you think and vote on the poll.
Will add more details about quest, thx for reading,
~Arcani~

 

NEVER EVER make text white. light-themers (like myself) can't see it.

 

that's why dark theme is better

 

light theme sucksssss

 

Ok.
Never, ever, EVER, use the word scrub again, unless referring to yourself.
Besides that, game mechanics wont allow scroll disabling while inside specific areas, so take that part out.

 

Bump10char

 

Why do you spam the element symbols its cringy af

 

I'll update this with more things but in the first conversation he says that he is studying than he just tells you to talk to his friend... add more detail there please!

Stage 2

The things that happened in Stage 2 are totally different than then the things that the NPC told you to do, he was studying the machines then the other NPC wants help with the bunkers, I just think that there should be more connection between them!

Puzzles and parkour

You said first that you will add the puzzle like the Llevigar quest one then you said that you would have to make this puzzle again in the next stage.
First - Original puzzles are funnier.
Second - The same puzzle three times in the same game?

Change crystals, this will make your quest look like a copy of Wynn Excavation.

Then after you see that the core is broken you have the same first Dialogue problem

Golden circuit board in Llevigar? Don't create mechanical and technological stuff outside of Corkus

Didn't understand the end with the "a village being held to stilts with lava underneath it"

 

Sure I see the problem I'll add more dialog

 

Now the good opinion, I don't know anything about mobs but they look pretty balanced and cool, the story behind the quest is really cool too! Hope to see some improvements, the end and the part 2

 

Added new boss

 

bump10char

 

What's a rouge adventurer

 

Thx for pointing out its meant to be rogue

________________________________

What do ya think about the quest tho

 

You're* <3

 

Sobs auto correct

 

Did this

I see your point I'll change this too

Will do

I'll fix this

This applies to the one before it I'll apply the context

Yeah I was in a rush I'll change the design of the chamber entirely.

Okay thx for the feed back I should have everything changed in the next few ours and I'll message you when I'm done.
Thanks,
~Arcani~

 

¯\_(ツ)_/¯

 

The quest is pretty good compared to most quests. Really I don't know what to put afterwards so..

¯\_(ツ)_/¯

 

The Steel Bull is OP for lvl 85's it has more HP then Bob, is this some INSANE storyline quest or something?
BTW I really like your quest! Switch up some of the lines and it will be great!!!
Ex. Rrrrgggghhh.. Oh! Can you hel... Sorry, you are not strong enough to do this... Maybe come back at level 85...