Quest Lv 75 Name:fall Of Ragni

Quest lv 75 hard (not sure plz help me) name: fall of ragni (plz help me)

Warning: this is my first quest and I'm open for criticism and plz keep in mind that I this made this quest before gavel update so there is no element dam or def
But I hope you like it. Anyways here it comes
Talking before the quest (ooh god ooh god we need help but you don't seems strong enough come back when you are lv 75)
starting (Arnold) oh god you need to help us! This hole city is in danger and maybe even the province. the King of ragni turned into stone we found him this morning And he doesn't have a son to take over for him Oh I'm Sorry i should maybe tell you something about it but there is a guy who knows more sheif he's in the kitchen go talk to him

Go to sheif In the kitchen
Talking to him before the quest (hey don't touch my food)

SHEIF: oh so you want to here about the King yes it's tragic. the thing there happend whas i where walking into hes room with he's breakfast and i saw a shadow i ask who it whas. And the only thing i heard whas your worst nightmare. Then i got knocked out. when i woke up the King whas in hes bed made out of stone. But I don't have more to tell you should go back to Arnold.

ARNOLD: so the King had one enemy but i don't think he would have done that hes an mage Living in maltic.
Go there
(If you talk to him before quest start he will say: shh Im Concentrating)
SUDARAN (the Mage): what! why are you blaming me for a such horrible thing. i know me and the King had our issues but im not a murder but i might know something that Can help him its an old gem its hidden deep down in an cave under the big volcano in the sea (-755 -4285). Its called the saphire of wishes and it can give one wish for the person that will complete the taskes to get in there but it looks like the thing you need the the potion of ever life a potion that can cure everything so get the gem and wish you one potion now go

The Cave has 5 floors with a Challenge when you complete an Challenge there will be a door with an Stare Case leading Down there is opening in the end of the room. all Rooms are kind of dark. and the 6 floor ther will be a boss wich drops an Saphire of wishes

floor 1:an parkour lapiz going around in a circle shape until you hit the end about 20 jumps

floor 2: 3 buttons like in animal dungeon just closer and an bridge No parkour they all need to be lighted to make the door open (the Light will stay on for 6 sec). mobs deadly shooter Dam 400-500 Health 1500

Floor 3 in this room there will be 10 different Doors with a buttons beside it 9 of Them will spawn an mob silver guardian Dam 700-800 Health 1000 and one of them will open the door for the next room

Floor 4

floor 5 sand worms (2 of Them) Dam 500- 900 Health 3500 spell warrior uppercut spell Dam 800-1000 (50 blocks long room door at the end....so yes you Can just run through)

floor 6 when you Walk into this room there will be something there is speaking and then you will be teleported into another room with and Saphire Guardian
the voise you hear is saying: its ben a long time since any adventure have completet this many of the Challenges. So you are rellay the strongest. But know the true test face me and get what you want

mob Saphire Guardian Dam 1000-1200 Health 150000 regen 20000 per 5 second spell charge dam 400-600 drop Saphire of wishes

at the end of the room will there be an door with an teleporter and it will teleport you into a Big shiny room with alot of Light and with an pool in the middle if you jump into the pool the emerald will disappear and you will get an potion of ever life into you "backpack" there wil be an teleporter at the end of the room go into that one and you will end up on top of the volcano (-672 -4219).
Then go back to Arnold: ohh thanks lord your back I thought you where dead and you got something to cure the king with ooh god this is amazing I don't now how to thank you enough plz take this as a reward you will need it on your adventure. But now we just need to find out who did this to the king
Reward 5 le 600.000 xp (not totally sure about it plz help me)
And a half consumed potion of ever life 2 charges back. Effect put you on full health and remove all negative effects

 

This is basically just hive and toa

 

Has some grammar errors. But can pretty work.

 

please fix your grammar, "this hole city is in danger"

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im sry? i get it, that your typing it for the thing, but if it was a real quest, it would be im sorry, not im sry.

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the only thing i hard whas your worst nightmare?

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you know what, overall just fix your grammar

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what happend to taking the potion to the king... what was the point of getting the potion... yeah seems normal enough, and you dont even fight the shadow or get to meet it, no offense, with all the mistakes i say this quest sucks, but it would be good if fixed it >_>

 

Pretty good, but I just see one error:
NPC that are already talking on another quest can't appear on more.
Just chage it and it wil be fine.

 

The boss should have like 150,000 health, CoW has 100k health and its just a lvl 68 quest.

 

What's a Sheif?
The boss's hp is to low, what about regen?

 

Ye i know you don't get to meet or fight him but that's just to make people think about who it whas and maybe theories about it and I had a lot of auto correct problems because I'm not using English keyboard so it whas pretty hard to make it work all the time

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A sheif......is the name of the guy who makes the food

 

i think you meant chef, even though you dont have English keyboard, it doesnt matter if you speak english you should know ( unless you didnt get an education) if you speak an other language, just say.

 

Ok im not that good at English. We don't have it that much in school and yes I'm not English I'm Danish

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And no it is he's name :D

 

Okay. List time.
1. This is essentially the ToA or The Qira Hive. Maybe some more creativeness?
2. Grammar and punctuation?
3. Maybe make the quest text a bit more like it is? A wall of text is not the best way to convey it. For example:
Areltar: I don't think that's possible. After all... I... I'm not actually your ally. I've been deceiving you all this time.
Compared to:
[1/5] Areltar: I don't think that's possible.
[2/5] Areltar: After all...
[3/5] Areltar: I...
[4/5] Areltar: I'm not actually your ally.
[5/5] Areltar: I've been deceiving you all this time.
Which looks more better in terms of immersion?
4. Again, this is a visual issue. Mob stats are confusing to read in a single sentence. Maybe try something more like:
Sapphire Guardian
1000-1200 Damage
150000 Health
20000 Regen
Spell: Charge, Spell Damage 400-600
Drops Sapphire of Wishes
[insert other mob information here]
5. Arnold says that there's a guy who knows more but this guy who "knows more" just refers you back to Arnold for the most important piece of info? What?
6. Aren't the Molten Islands being used for Wynn Excavation Site C?
7. So... What happens to the culprit? Is there a part 2?
8. Last one. Experience for that level is closer to 300,000 than 600,000. This is nearly twice as much as even Reincarnation's quest reward.
And that's all I have to say.

 

YES!!! YES!!! YESS!!! ALL I CAN SAY TO THIS IS YES!!!
sorry I just really appreciate people that actually add DETAIL. I hate when people make undetailed suggestion or suggestions with only 2 worlds. The "Reduce Lag" thread....
*shivers and cries inside...

 

Ty I will think of it if I make a quest more but it is my first one and I now there is problems