Lore/Story Skytown (2014)

This is a short story I made about a "haunted" island in the sky. This was made in 2014, when I started making stories, so it's not the same as what I could do now. I decided to scrap this story because there were too many plot holes and lack of satisfaction with it. I also named the chapters as episodes for whatever reason.
I'm actually sort of disappointed with this now that I look at it 2 years later.

Timeline (Contains things that are not told in the story): Link
Chapter 1: Link
Chapter 2: Link
Chapter 3: Link
Chapter 4: Link
Chapter 5: Link
Chapter 6: Link
Chapter 7: Link
Chapter 8: Link
Chapter 9: Link
Chapter 10: Link
Chapter 11: Link
Chapter 12: Link
Chapter 13: Link
Chapter 14: Link

 

wow this is amazing ! Actually amazing !#RikioForGM

 

I actually plan on making a Wynn story very soon. It's not going to be short like this one, that's for sure. I just have trouble coming up with the main character's names.

 

Just having read through it quickly, the combat feels fairly cliche with the back and forth dialogue. It feels more like a movie script to me.

Overall, solid story, a bit fluffy and wishy-washy, but nice.

 

Yeah, it is pretty cliché. And I actually like writing my stories in a script-like form, instead of saying "He said" "She said to him" or just having a lot of text that's supposed to be an expression or dialogue. I just find this way to be simpler to read.