Lore/Story Concept: Troms Ultimate Discovery

A couple years ago I made a Troms ultimate discovery suggestion that I still like the idea of. However, the dialogue was terrible and it hasn't aged well, so I decided to make a new version of it.

Italics describe what is happening in the cutscene

Note that this secret discovery takes place within Troms

The Corrupter's Clash (Level 70)
+300000 experience points
When the portal mysteriously opened in 0 AP, a powerful beast emerged from the portal and terrorized the province for centuries. One day, something was finally done about it.

589 AP

Rickeo and Dwendle Twain are sitting in a cafe in Troms. They're looking at a newspaper.
[1/25] Dwendle: ...I can't believe he would.. No...
[2/25] Rickeo: Are you really surprised? You saw how he desecrated our father's gravesite, didn't you?
[3/25] Dwendle: That's not nearly as bad as freezing an entire forest, though. People lived there. They'll die.
[4/25] Dwendle: I just don't understand.. He seemed like he wanted to protect the locals.. not... not..
Bells start to ring. A loud explosion is heard, causing the brothers to turn around. A guard runs past and is chased by the Corrupter of Worlds. The brothers nod at each other and run towards the beast
[5/25] Troms Guard: AAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!!
[6/25] Rickeo: HEY, MONSTER!
[7/25] Dwendle: Ricke, it's the beast from the portal. I'm having second thoughts about this....
[8/25] Rickeo: Nonsense. If we can beat Theorick, we can beat this thing too.
The Corrupter kills the guard and then turns around to face the brothers. Townsfolk can be seen in the background fleeing or watching from a safe distance. The Corrupter charges at them which is met with a powerful blast of fire from Rickeo, knocking it upwards. Dwendle throws it midair into a wall using a strong gust of wind, causing the Corrupter to roar as it collides with the stone bricks.
[9/25] Rickeo: Take that, monster!
The Corrupter shakes it off and goes invisible to hide from Rickeo and Dwendle. It then appears behind them and loudly roars, which knocks the brothers away.
[10/25] Dwendle: Guh!
[11/25] Rickeo: Urgh... This thing likes to go invisible. What are we going to do?
Dwendle spots a bucket filled with paint nearby and uses air magic to hurl it at the beast. The Corrupter is now covered in red paint. It goes invisible again but is seen thanks to the paint which allows Rickeo and Dwendle to send a fire tornado at it. The corrupter is caught in the fire tornado which causes the red paint to spin off. Spectating citizens in the background can be seen cheering.
[12/25] Rickeo: Nice one!
The corrupter angrily roars and charges at the townsfolk.
[13/25] Rickeo: NO!
Rickeo jumps in the way and is injured, but the Corrupter is pulled back by Dwendle who starts using a multitude of spells on it until it lies on the ground, defeated. Dwendle rushes over to Rickeo who is surrounded by townsfolk
[14/25] Dwendle: Ricke, are you okay?
[15/25] Rickeo: Yes... I'm fine...
[16/25] Rickeo: Perhaps I shouldn't have been so cocky... That was more dangerous than I expected...
Rickeo is helped up and is brought to the defeated Corrupter
[17/25] Rickeo: Is it dead?
[18/25] Dwendle: Not yet. Let's finish it off with a combined spell!
A powerful fire and air spell is used on the Corrupter, but nothing happens.
[19/25] Rickeo: Huh?
The brothers repeatedly cast the spell, but to no avail
[20/25] Dwendle: Ugh, forget this. I'll just rip its heart out instead.
Dwendle rips its heart out
[21/25] Dwendle: Huh? It's still not dead?
[22/25] Rickeo: Look... It's growing a new heart..
[23/25] Dwendle: I think this thing might be immune to death... We'll have to seal it somewhere instead.
[24/25] Rickeo: How will the seal be maintained though? How can we know it won't break out after our deaths?
[25/25] Dwendle: Hmmm....
Rickeo and Dwendle went on to found the Temple of the Legends, a prestigious temple dedicated to the protection of Wynn.
To make sure the Corrupter of Worlds stayed down, people who wanted to join the Temple were required to "kill" the beast again.
After that day, the beast never terrorized the province ever again, putting a stop to one of Wynn's biggest threats.

 

Pretty neat idea, fills in plot holes regarding CoW and Temple of Legends. I have a few suggestions though.
First, I think the setting of a cafe is too...modern? It seems a tad generic, and should probably be in some merchant's shop, or, given the Twains' prestige, a room in the Troms Castle, where they can jump off a balcony or so.
Secondly, I think that if a ravaging beast of mass destruction came running into town, their would be enough screaming to nullify the sound of bells.

But yeah, other than that, good suggestion.

 

cool idea, but agree with @Rythew , you should probably change the cafe to some pub or something else medieval