Art Poetry: Item Buyer

So @Shiazzu wrote a poem here and someone replied to the thread that they preferred a rhyming version.
Here it is:

Secluded, and hidden - reunions unbidden,
Is that of the life of the old aging man.
Surrounded by people, he stays there, still feeble,
Awaiting a motive, a dream, a command...

With thoughts: he then wondered; his patrons then numbered...
And out of them few would have choices and will.
He came to conclusion; they lacked resolution,
-effectively useless, worth nothing, worth nil.

Indifferent to beauty, invested in duty,
The majesty shown by the bright setting sun,
Will never be noticed, for their eyes unfocused:
And only regarding their sole will to run.

 

This is actually neither similar to the other one, nor as good as it.

 

This is good.

 

Explain why?

Thanks!

 

It is different when you look. It's good but most of the words arent the same with the other one, and dont mean 100% the other poem.