Aetherius Roleplay [10/15]

"Something, something, the 'heroes' killed them."

 

yeah

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I proceed to spend a good five minutes laughing.

"Killed Krakov?" the woman says. "That is foreboding news."

 

"Sounds good, then."
I say, shrugging.

 

so what do you say to a vacation in ahmsord Florfy?

 

I'm pretty sure I'm with you guys, but I agree with this

 

*Gets fedora and sunglasses* Yep.

 

*shrug*

 

"In any case why are you here?" the man says

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@Florfy5 @joshaftel @RetiFile @RogueHatter
You are welcomed in Deltas as heroes. and yes you get a feast..

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"Well. time to attack Deltas."

 

Wait, @Bailwolf, am I even allowed to disclose that information?

 

aw man it looks like the turkey'll be overcooked
oh and everything on fire
@Florfy5 ready to devise a strategy? I already have one in mind

 

well...its your character

 

"Lead the way."
I offer, taking the stone that he offered earlier.

 

"Trying to kill a spy."

 

So when does detlas get attacked

 

Alright, I was going to make a character, but this is just too confusing. The main post is hard to read and hard to understand. Before I make a character, I'm just going to give a few suggestions on how to make this easier to understand.

- In lists of things, such as the list of factions, separate each new item with a line break, like so.

Note: The Magic faction has Scribe and Battle-Mage in the faction list, but these classes are nonexistent in the class list. I recommend changing this to Alchemist and Mage, as they appear in the class list.

- Make it easier to differentiate factions in the class list. Here is my idea for that.

- Separate the rules with numbers, like so.

- Provide more information. I have no idea how classes work. I can't choose a class, only a faction. How do I choose a class if there is no option to do so? At least tell us if there is some specific thing we have to do in order to choose a class.

- Put the map information in its own spoiler, rather than sitting in the middle of the "The Land" spoiler.

- Speaking of the spoilers, I don't think that the rules, application form, and character list should go in the "The Land" spoiler.

These are just recommendations. dvsdbvv

 

We can't just remove battle mage we have 2 already

 

Kill them with a giant anvil.

 

@EpicMario13Satan
OK bear in mind this is my first roleplay. Some of the stuff you pointed out was an accident. Classes don't really matter and I should probably take that out.

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"I suppose Thaglis sent you. She thinks I am conspiring with the Queen." the man says.

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You drop through the nether portal to see a mass of zombies and demons gathered outside the portal. "Behold my army! TO DELTAS!!!"

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just right a two sentence bio and give yourself a weapon. You'll do fine. (This is a joke)

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@Florfy5 @RetiFile
You hear a large army approaching from Ragni. The demons have arrived.

 

I grab my new weapon and alert the guard and any paladins that followed us from nesaak

 

nope no paladins. However i think with a bunch of op weapons you'll be fine XD