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Lore/Story Chapter I - The Three Patriots

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  1. Zitrine

    Zitrine Lore-kun CHAMPION

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    Before reading this one, be sure to read the prologue!
    https://forums.wynncraft.com/threads/prologue-the-elimination.106036/

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    Well, time has come to another part of my story about the four greatest heroes of Wynn, Gavel, Fruma and Dern! It'll take a while to get to them, but in chapter 4, I want the Mage to be introduced.

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    CHAPTER I - The Three Patriots​

    Berath never knew who his parents were. He was moved to an orphanage when he was just a few weeks old. He grew up in this orphanage learning about the four provinces’ stories and their history. When he was twenty years old, they learned about the old army. It says the old army was led by the old queen and they were loyal to each other. However, one day the army apparently assaulted the queen. The four governments formed a super government and made a new army, called The Superarmy. The Superarmy’s goal was to eliminate the old army, thus starting The Elimination. They were successful. Every single herosoldier - as they were called - got eliminated and peace was back. This event happened for roughly around twenty years ago, and as the years have gone, groups of rebels grew. These rebels are hiding, and recruiting people whenever they have the chance. They call themselves 'The Arisen Patriots'. With their great skills, the government hasn't found them. And one day, The Arisen Patriots (TAP) found Berath walking aimlessly around in Ragni.

    The group consisted of three patriot members, all three saw there was something special about Berath. He looked a bit rebellious, they thought.
    "We should really talk to him, guys", said the tallest one of them, he had a simple longbow on his back. "He can be useful to us", he continued as the two others looked at Berath.
    "I don't know, Myles", the girl in the group said. "He may look like someone who could be a rebel, but we can't just go around and recruit people like that, we're supposed to be unobtrusive about this. What do you think about him, Trevor?", she asked, as she looked around them, fearing someone heard them.
    "Hmm, I kind of agree with both of you. He could be useful to us, but alas, such good fortune, it looks too good to be true", Trevor said with a slight frown on his face. "Although... Fiena, we should try, I think we have a good patriot there!", the frown was replaced with a small smile on his young face.
    "Alrighty, let us do this. Should I do the talking?", Myles asked. Fiena and Trevor looked at each other and looked back to Myles.
    "As usual", they both said. Myles smiled and slowly walked up to Berath, who was bargaining with an item seller. "Hey, you!", Myles shouted to Berath.

    Berath turned his head and looked right into the face of a stranger. "Eh... what do you want?", he asked. He also saw the stranger's bow. He must be an adventurer, he thought. "Here on an adventure..?", Berath asked, what he didn't realize was that he did sound a bit rude.
    "No", the stranger replied. "I want to talk with you. You owe me something, remember?", he said. Berath didn't know this guy, so he assumed this guy just wanted money.
    "Do I owe you something? We don't even know each other! I don't want to talk to you, I don't really talk to strangers", Berath said directly. He won't let this stranger gain money from him. Suddenly, - and really fast - the stranger took Berath's arm and threw him on the ground.
    "You owe me, now come with me", he said, and Berath realized he won't leave this guy without a fight. Berath quickly rolled away from the adventurer and he stood up and prepared himself to battle. "I don't want to do this, but you leave me no choice", The adventurer said and ran forward against him but Berath was quick. He jumped to the side and gave the adventurer a hit in the back and took his arm and twisted it. He had locked the stranger's arms, but not the legs. The adventurer hit Berath with his legs in Berath's crotch. Berath lost the grip of the adventurer and gave away a high gasp of pain. This stranger really knows how to fight, he thought. He can't be a normal adventurer. Berath's pain didn't last long, he was already up and on his way to beat the adventurer, once and for all.

    Fiena and Trevor looked at the two guys having a small fight. They knew it wouldn't go well for any of them if they continued. Trevor gave away a small sound of sympathy when he saw Myles kick Berath in the crotch. Fiena giggled. She got serious in just a second though. "Trevor, I think we have to end this battle. Let me take care of the stranger and you take Myles", she said. "He'll be easy to take out from the battle", Fiena said, with a small grin. Fiena and Trevor ran towards the fighters and easily ripped them apart. Fiena dragged away Berath and locked his arms with a rope she had in her bag. Myles walked towards Berath with a calm face. "Hey, I'm sorry I had to fight you. You wouldn't want to listen. Let's go down to the sewers," he said. They walked outside of Ragni's walls and down the stairs to the ravine. They took the ladders into the sewers and climbed in. It wasn't nice, and the smell was terrible.
    "Just a question, what do I owe you?", Berath asked and raised an eyebrow. "Who even are you?", he said and looked at the three patriots. He realized these weren't normal adventurers.
    "We are three ordinary adventurers, and we want a fourth friend to accompany us", Fiena replied. "And you don't owe us anything, we only used that as an excuse to let you come with us, but you didn't want to. You were a little bit of a rebel, there", she said, with emphasis on rebel and blinked to him.
    "Me? A rebel? Against w... ohhh...", he said, and then he realized these three were members of The Arisen Patriots. He had heard of them of a rebellious schoolmate. The Arisen Patriots are really well hidden and the government doesn't know about them. "You are... patriots. What do you want from me?"
    "Oh, nothing special, just wanting you to join our little rebellion", Trevor told him. "We need more people to join us and this is how we recruit people. Usually people aren't as intelligent as you to realize we are patriots until we tell them" Berath couldn't believe his ears. Is he speaking with three traitors to the four provinces?
    "I should report you. You are traitors. You...", he began to say, but got abrupt by Myles.
    "Shush. We are not traitors, we will tell you once we reach the head quarters. Our leader will tell you the stories that made us arise from the blindness that the government has made. Please trust us, the government isn't what it looks like", he told him. "By the way, what is your name?", Myles asked.
    "Ehh, Berath, why?"
    "Because once you've told your name to a patriot, you are a patriot", Trevor said, and looked at Fiena and gave her a big smirk. "I told you he'd be a great patriot!", he said to Fiena, and started laughing. This is the beginning of something really great, Trevor said to himself.

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    I really hope you enjoyed this chapter, I sure had fun writing it. in chapter two, the group of patriots go to the Head Quarters of The Arisen Patriots and will talk to their leader and introduce Berath to the other patriots. If you guys want a patriot named after you (With your personality, too!) be sure to tell me!

    I'm sorry for making it long, I know reading long stories gets kinda boring after a while...
     
    Last edited: Jan 21, 2016
  2. Kpar

    Kpar God of Omegar. Lord of the 8th realm.

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    I like it alt ,,,,,,,
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    CheesePrince13 Eternally Inactive HERO

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    Dem crotch-shots tho.
     
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  4. Zitrine

    Zitrine Lore-kun CHAMPION

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    Thanks :3

    I just had to make that happen... xD
     
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    Zitrine Lore-kun CHAMPION

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    .... bump, I want feedback ;>
     
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    Devourer Lava Warrior VIP+

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    Well, I loved the fight! I can see that this is going to be great from reading both this and the prologue. And this chapter length is just about right.
     
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    Zitrine Lore-kun CHAMPION

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    It was the first thing I've done ;> This is basically the first time I write something out of school :P
    And thanks ^^
     
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    Rawb Disciple of Bak'al

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    I liked the fight because it did not include bladed weapons. That's new.
     
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    Zitrine Lore-kun CHAMPION

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    Bladed weapons are so mainstream. ;p
     
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    Rawb Disciple of Bak'al

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    oh btw

    Do you know why the hipster burned his tongue?

    He drank his coffee before it was cool!

    hahahaha...ha...uh Ill go now
     
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  11. XavierEXE

    XavierEXE ♪ Wynncraft's Composer and Ability Tree Lead ♫ ♪ Music Item Team CHAMPION

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    This is really good so far, just about to read chapter two!
     
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    Rawb Disciple of Bak'al

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    XavierEXE ♪ Wynncraft's Composer and Ability Tree Lead ♫ ♪ Music Item Team CHAMPION

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    Damn, do I get a warning point now?
    Should I delete the post?
    I was just giving feedback ;c
     
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    Rawb Disciple of Bak'al

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    Probably not. The necro was on topic though, so from what I know that's fine.
     
  15. Zitrine

    Zitrine Lore-kun CHAMPION

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    Nice necro, and thanks, I guess xD
     
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