Omegar(remade/fixed)

long ago there existed an ancient primal province. It was known as Omegar. The two species that controlled it were the Kpians and Arkites. Together after eons of conflict, they formed a council to govern over Omegar. Both species were Immortal(like elves and Helioux). The Kpians were rainbow skinned shapeshifters and were hard to kill. The Arkites looked like humans, however, they could scream loud enough to break Ekotian glass(diamond glass). During the Age of Light and Dark, Omegar noticed 4 provinces gaining power: Fruma, Dern, Gavel and Wynn. At first, the council did not mind these provinces. 3 of the provinces met with Omegar councilers to discuss a treaty. Dern, started to look with rage at Omegar. Dern decided to attack Omegar with such force and chaos that words can not describe. For 300 years the 2 warred with each other. In the end, Omegar was victorious and Dern was forced to surrender and vow never to attack Omegar ever again. After the war, an outbreak of Zartitus(deadly disease) appeared in the grand Kpian city of Zetor. 10,000 died of the disease. The council began to worry and decided to have a group of mages to study the disease. The mages responded that the disease was from the war with Dern. During that same month, Omegar closed its borders and was not seen for thousands of years. The other provinces began to wonder, even Dern. Omegar issued an order that until the disease is permanently gone, Omegar will keeps its gates shut. The provinces heard nothing more of Omegar and knew the epidemic permanently damaged it and believed Omegar would never recover.


Credit people who helped me : Flubby

 

Still could use some more work, but better. This only really tells the lore of Omegar, and not much quests or towns. Also this should be in General Suggestions
Even if you made a new province, I doubt it would get added.

 

I will Mabye make another thing about Omegar. Be patient
One town was mentioned though read carefully.

 

Please, for the sake of not ruining his thread by getting it locked, don't post anything like ganon or plasma. Just leave CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM, about whatever this is. No sarcasm, no jokes, no hateful comments.
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even if this isn't good, or, maybe it is, they might use the name, or part of the lore, or take small chunk and add it into a quest or some secret or easter egg

 

I never said it was bad.

And also that font hurts my eyes.

 

It doesn't help that he doesn't take "constructive criticism" well.

Also stop using that font. It sticks out like a sore thumb and is really irritating.

 

1. the "bad" part wasn't referring to you
2. Is this better? Is this better? Is this better? Is this better? Is this better? Tell me which is better. Or is this font better? I MIGHT use this.

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You and Memory are the only ones to complain since I started using it, which was a month ago...

 

I'm fine with literally every font available except Courier New.
and comic sans, but it's not here so...

 

Except you've only recently started to post a bunch. Now you're basically everywhere.

Also I'm 90% sure you only started to use this font when you switched to the Undertale-Cancer name.

 

I'll use....a mix of both, as a compromise, and also Verdana.

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1. uhm, you just arent around when I post a bunch
2. true

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Lets...not do this here, not on this thread....this is why his other thread was locked....Lets please stop.

 

Hmm...
Better.
But here's some constructive criticism. I shit you not, this is not meant to "hate" your idea.
1. Wynn, rising? The Taproot said that it was a ground zero for a light-dark war.
2. Towns? What level is this province?
3. More creature examples? It's possible that Fruma has Grooks, and of course Gavel is filled with mythical creatures.
4. Where would this place be located?
5. Terrain examples?
6. We're not so sure of Dern quite yet. I think Dern theories should wait a while.

 

Seriously...

 

It would be amazing if I was credited here...

Anyways

One-Eyed has a point here. If you could implement things details this, then people would take this province suggestion more seriously.

 

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No, this was the reason.

 

did ya look at the bottom? :3

 

People have already started making ideas for new provinces when they just barely came out with one that took more then a year to make and they still have 2 more to make (Dern and Fruma). Like people calm yourselves.

 

I'm not sure who you're talking about here: Me or Kp?

 

Obviously Kp lol

 

I meant that as...the arguing/the rudeness, and unnecessary comments. Ganon was just plain INSULTING him, and plasma was going along with that.
Anyway. thanks for pointing out ANOTHER reason.